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europegetready
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My heart is a stalker
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February 05, 2010, 11:22:54 PM »
My heart pounds when I see you
Pounds on a door to my brain
But my brain won't answer
You see,
My brain thinks my heart is a stalker
A lurk
It blocked it on facebook and my space
My brain wants a restraining order
On my heart
My heart keeps bothering my brain
But my brain keeps shutting it down
My heart gets tired
Sitting out in the rain
All it wants is to have a friendly chat
Its like those Jehovah's witnesses
Who come into your house and try
To convert you
But my brains just as stubborn
and my hearts slowing down
Having second thoughts
So step in,
Please
Tell my brain to let my heart in
So maybe
I can like you too.
Maya h.
doesn't really work, just a rough draft
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Frank E Gibbard
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Re: My heart is a stalker
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April 01, 2010, 07:12:02 PM »
Hi e, you should polish this as you suggest as I think it deserves the work you suggested as this is only a draft. It is in a quiet part of the site and might get more attention if you repost it in the main forum. I like the modern references to networking by the way and the general idea of the subjects addressed here. Good luck.
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