Education A Lost Cause

[poetryladycat]

Education A Lost Cause
By Lori Triggs
Copyrighted Feb. 2010

Education was important at one time,
now it is on the back burner not important.

In the U.S.A.  we ranked number one in education,
now in the U.S.A.  we  rank 13th in education.

Americans cannot even comprehend English language
besides math or science even sex education.

Americans talk with text or iming words thinking that the English language
when Americans today are alliterate cannot read or write even do math.

Our states even government wants to take away
12th grade from high school what's next?
11TH grade than no high school suppose to be going forward not backwards.

So we need to fix education and our government,
because education comes first and the fat cats like the senators ,
and the congressman come last no more free rides plus free dinners.

We need to rank number one in education again!

[agib00]

poetrycat- While I agree with some of this, I see no poetic value.
It reads perhaps like a letter to the editor, to a school board or such.

I do agree with points within: just not as a poem.

Thanks,

[Mule]

My take on this poem generally coincides with that of the other work you have posted on this site.

That said, the very worst thing you can do for this poem is leave it in this unedited state.  The only reasonable exception would be if, in order to augment your point, you purposely make it worse.

[Helvetica]

Mule,

I felt that the weak grammar and poor spelling was intentional. I think it would be stronger if the grammar and spelling quickly degenerated towards the end of the poem, ending with the last strophe as mere babble.

[Mule]

Helvetica,

I agree with your idea for the poem but, having read PLC's other work, I don't believe it was intentional.  I also don't believe she will stop writing, or change her style because of my, often harsh, opinion.  And so I say, "Good for her!"

[martinh20]

Hi Lori, I feel you should explore your imagination a bit more, as really this sort of stuff is beyond redemption as far as 'poetry' is concerned, and I feel you have a lot more to offer than these repetitive rants against society. I feel you have it in you to write something more interesting and imaginative that people would enjoy reading.
                                                                                                                     Bill.